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Hello to all once again!

As some may know over the past few weeks, I have been revisiting my Jurassic Park Project and I've been delighted by some of my findings. I never realised how much detail I had thrust into it with pages and pages of sketches and plans and list and diagrams and all manner of nick-nacks! I also have been horrified by one major atrocity that simply cannot be forgotten.

But it happened that I did. I remembered late last night that I had written a story back in 2012 or 2013 so I would have been about 13 or 14 years old on the popular story sharing website, Wattpad. It then took me a millennium to remember my password, which was ridiculously trivial and something 13 yer old me would have thought was absolutely side splittingly hilarious!

*eye roll, deep sigh* So there's several things I've learnt from reading this story:

Number one, I simply could not write. Despite being top in my class for creative writing at the time, I have never read anything so atrociously written in my life. If it were a book, I would burn it. If it were an animal, I would put it out of its misery, its that bad! A common technique most story writers use is the show not tell method, where the writer discreetly drops hints as to the setting/topic/character etc. so that the reader can create some vision of the 'thing' and try and work it out themselves and add their own creative twist to it. OH NO! 2013/13 Jamie decided to use the 'BLURT OUT EVERY DETAIL ABOUT THE CHARACTER UPON MEETING THEM' method, which sadly *deep sarcasm* doesn't have the same effect!

Secondly, its practically the place where continuity errors come to die. A character can be doing something utterly mind numbing such as one case, where a character spends about half a chapter brushing her hair until I come back to mentioning her! I also really tend to develop horrendously two dimensional characters not mentioning their thoughts and feelings at all, only literally writing down their actions step by step. One character makes a coffee and I write out EACH INDIVIDUAL STEP OF HOW SHE MAKES IT. AND YES THIS IS ALL IN A DINOSAUR ZOO/SAFARI PARK/RESORT (whatever Jurassic Park comes under, idk for sure!). Another even says how boring it is to work there. IF I WORKED AT A DINOSAUR ZOO/SAFARI PARK/RESORT, I WOULD BE THE HAPPIEST PERSON ON EARTH. I WOULD TURN INTO ONE OF THOSE ALWAYS HAPPY DISNEY EMPLOYEE PEOPLE TELL YOU ABOUT, NOT MOPING AROUND!

And breath. 

I must state now that I would never say of this to anyone else! As the great writer, Neil Gaiman once said you are your own worst critic and the only way that you can improve your writing, is by rereading after a long time away, stepping back and looking at the bigger picture and reading aloud!

To conclude, is going to be a much bigger job than I thought, not just a few sentence changes and rejiggery. Oh hella no! We're talking rewriting whole chapters (which were surprisingly short at the start?) to make them actually up to my now standard of writing. I'm going to actually give characters thoughts and feelings! Plus, being as I've lost my 'master plan' of the story, I have no clue where I'm going with it!

Heres the story if anyone is desparate to read it! It will be like this for a limited time while serious reconstructive work is done! www.wattpad.com/7730157-park-l…

Pangearas friends, do not fret! I have been working on some more pieces! Final touches are in the works as well as one I've started today which I love to bits! Expect an upload sometime this week.

Thanks all and do not fret in asking me anything about my questions and well as thoughts and critiques!

JP Out!
:)
  • Listening to: Santigold - Shooting Arrows at the Sky
  • Reading: A Clash of Kings
  • Watching: iZombie
  • Drinking: Lemonade bebeh!

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Jamie / JP
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Hello Deviants!
JPkeeper22's the name. I love to draw dinosaurs, animals and most of my work will be from my Jurassic Park Project or illustrations for my fan fictions. I hope that you all like them!

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Dontknowwhattodraw94 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Happy birthday, Jamie! :D
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SameerPrehistorica Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2016  Hobbyist
***HAPPY BIRTHDAY***
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Lady-Landeline Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2015  Student Artist
Thank you for the fav'!^^
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RueTris Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Student Photographer
Thanks for the watch!
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HinataUcchan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks for the fave :)
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painted-wolfs-den Featured By Owner May 28, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks for the fave!
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ChenoaEllinghaus Featured By Owner May 22, 2015  Professional General Artist
Thank you for the favorite!
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dinodanthetrainman Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the +fav! :) (Smile)
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JL98 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you for the favorite and the watch :D
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Dontknowwhattodraw94 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks for the favorite!
Now that I'm here I just realised I haven't seen anything from you for quite a while. How's it going? :)
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